not sure what to title this one yet

[shiftless]

STILL WORKIN ON THIS ONE...NEEDS A GOOD CHORUS YET

I WELCOME ALL COMMENTS AND THOUGHTS



You all will dilate and fall along the side
Your rhythm is a train wreck; your melody a nightmare
Your thoughts lack insight and function.
Keep crying and whining till you come full circle
Do you see it? See it now?


Your actions stem from jealousy
For lack of what you have
You crave to be charismatic
But envy screens all charm
Hopelessly diluted and bound to this
You cannot see your faults
Stretched beyond the point of rebound
Abandoned in the end


Slaves to the past and dead to the future
There is no new and improved
Dead and buried like a language past
With every sound you spew
Storm the villa and take him out
They need an excuse to be lame
Rest in peace but they’ll rip you off
Coin him on your new dime

Overconfident,
Ill-mannered for no cause
To think that you’re so great.
Leaves me at a total loss


You cooked a lie and left it here
We never did you wrong
That sh*t stops now. We know you know
No reason to pretend
What’s done is done. You had a choice
But chose to creep along
So spare us all the pity me’s and carbon copy songs

[creepyj]

[But chose to creep along]

I like it.

[shiftless]

thanks...i need to restructure this into a song....any ideas

[bs_kaufman]

jezus kriced
i think you just entirely summed up my self-image.
good stuff

[Garr]

You all will dilate and fall along the side

Hey, can you clarify this line for me? People are widening and falling along the side? Is this a metaphor or literal? What are you trying to say with this line. . .or am I looking at it too deeply?

I don't quite get what it means. . .

dilate
v. di·lat·ed, di·lat·ing, di·lates
v. tr.

To make wider or larger; cause to expand.

v. intr.

1. To become wider or larger; expand.
2. To speak or write at great length on a subject; expatiate.

[netselfaxman]

You all will dilate and fall along the side

Hey, can you clarify this line for me? People are widening and falling along the side? Is this a metaphor or literal? What are you trying to say with this line. . .or am I looking at it too deeply?

I don't quite get what it means. . .

dilate
v. di�lat�ed, di�lat�ing, di�lates
v. tr.

To make wider or larger; cause to expand.

v. intr.

1. To become wider or larger; expand.
2. To speak or write at great length on a subject; expatiate.

Its a metaphor.